Saturday, July 9, 2011

Yearning For You....

Yearning For You....




Close yet so apart,
Though not really afar,
The distance makes me shrill...
Wanting me to hold you,
Near to my heart.
With every ebb and tide,
A nebulous anguish engulfs me...
And the warm mellow feeling fades,
Stabbing me to the core,
And tears threaten to fall...
As I languish in amour...

-Fatima 





26 comments:

  1. Beautiful post, full of mush and a loving rhyming write up.

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  2. Hey Fatima,
    Its a beautiful post...
    :)

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  3. nice use of language... and a rich collection of words.. Mus say, m thoroughly impressed

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  4. The feel in the first verse carries its impression all through. Coming to terms with the situation is what it feels at the end, yet the words convey something else...

    Nice one! :-)

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  5. frist two lines reminded me of "nothing else matters", amazingly beautiful and very poetic...very well written...good pen...good luck

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  6. loved the rhyme scheme...love longing despair mush...all in one...beautifully written...:)

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  7. this was very fresh and beautiful poem. great rhymes

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  8. Beautifully expressed with sweet rhyming :)

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  9. Nice and sensational!!
    Beautiful Rhyming...)

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  10. beautiful...and I can feel your words...

    Someone is Special

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  11. hmmm here's wishing that the distance is no more .. and all get what they want :)

    Bikram's

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  12. Mushy and poetic, this is.

    Well, this is supposed to be a poem, right? So bang on! Yearning is injurious to health, though.

    (:

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  13. The longing for someone to hold us, and the warmth of it, will take away all the pain...even if the tears fall, its love that remains forever...

    Beautiful words Fatima :)

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  14. @ Anshul: Yea there was affection with longing embedded..glad you liked it :)

    @ Anon: Thanks a lot Samidha..for the comment...glad you liked the poem, though it was a bit sad :)

    @ Eon: Yes longing...tried to hard to suppress but something just can't be!

    Thanks a lot for the read, glad you liked it :)

    Take Care.

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  15. @ Sti: Its a pleasant surprise seeing you here!

    Glad you liked it..thanks :)

    @ manshaa: Sometimes all one has to do is read in between the lines to know what it all means, and at times only a certain someone can feel it:)

    Glad you liked it!

    @ The Fallen Poet: Glad you liked it, thanks a lot for the kind words :)

    Take Care.

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  16. @ magiceye: Thanks a lot, and thanks for the visit!

    Welcome to my blog!

    @ vaisakhi: Yes, love longing and pain all in one...the pen writes what the heart feels :)

    @ Some unspoken words: Thanks a lot Anu, how are you doing ??

    Glad you liked it:)

    Take Care.

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  17. @ Simran: Glad you liked it dear..

    @ Usama: Thanks a lot..glad you liked it!

    @ SIS: Glad to hear that, that someone can feel the words and their meaning that have been penned down.

    @ the other side of me: Thanks a lot..glad you liked it:)

    Take Care.

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  18. @ Bikramjit: I wish what you said would come true...but when and where is what is uncertain :)

    Welcome to my blog, hope to see you here!

    @ Savage: I know what you mean to say Kankshita but what can one do ?? Esp if that one is me ??

    Glad you like the verses!

    @ Poonam: Wow the lines you penned down were amazing..yes if someone is there to hold you life becomes easy even though there are a lot of hardships!

    Glad you liked it:)

    Take Care.

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  19. The heart rhymes here... with beautiful feelings :) :)

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  20. @ Tanvi: Thanks a lot...Glad you liked it :)

    @ Ria: Thanks a lot dear :)

    Take Care.

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  21. Fatima, you are such a heart
    gathering poet. Oh!

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  22. @ Cynthia: Thanks a lot dear..it means a lot :)

    Glad you liked the verses.
    Welcome to my space, do keep visiting :)

    Take Care.

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